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In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard

#education #employment #people #work
Owning to some reasons, few
people
 tend to put extra effort to be successful in their career or class. They impose sufficient discipline on themselves to have outcome performs compared to
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people
.
This
 practice offers a gateway to get more salary, bonuses and can be appreciated by
people
 or can have a good grade at school, get to
a
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 excellent university and have a brighter future.
However
, if work so hard,
bother
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 diet, entertainment can exert
negative
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 impact on health. From
career’s
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a career’s
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 perspective, it
easily
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 to perceive why
people
in
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favor
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 of
hard
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hardworking
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working
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.
Career’
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Career
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 progression is one of
reasonable
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reason
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 for
this
 practice, due to pupils have
better
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a better
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 chance of promotions, huge waves and can be executive. In
term
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 of education, children are encouraged to put extra effort
on
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 learning because of
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the expectation
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expectation
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expectations
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 of family and
social
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. School and teachers
also
 appreciate well students
such
 brilliants or students who have good grades. And study harder give them a
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gate way
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 to top universities, where provide them
a
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well
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 environment than others. Obviously, by performing betters students can meet their ambitions and
a
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marvelous
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 jobs in the future.
Nonetheless
, it absolutely
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it
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 a good trend to hardworking, it not always is a good thing to put extra efforts. Outperforms can making extra efforts not only the pupils can enjoy the success at their academies, but
also
 hardworking workforce can reach the top-notch positions.
As a result
, they can live a highly admired materialistic life.
However
, overwork can lead to
health
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hazard
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 and psychological disorders. If
people
 over-indulged into their field and bother diet, interact with social or recreation it and
it
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 negative effects could be diabetes, hypertension,….A report published in the Times of India revealed that school-going children are suffering from various health hazards and have no more interested in studying because of stress due to over-study. In conclusion,
people
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have various reasons to work hard to raise their profile or boost prolific productivity.
Although
 working hard is beneficial in some aspects, too much of it can result in
the
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detrimental
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of
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 our physical wellbeing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Work ethic
  • Upbringing
  • Cultural values
  • Ambitions
  • Motivated
  • Fear of failure
  • Competitive nature
  • Overworking
  • Burnout
  • Stress-related health issues
  • Productivity
  • Quality of life
  • Healthy balance
  • Long-term productivity
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