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These days,too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine,rather than by following a healthy lifestyle Do you agree or disagree

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With the speed of modern and rush lifestyles, health plays an undeniable role in our
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many ways to have a healthy body, there are some
people
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 who prefer to depend on doctors and pharmacists than having their own balanced
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 with good habits. I completely disagree with
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 unscientific method. The
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 matter to be considered is dealing with potential because of only paying attention to find suitable medication rather than good food to absorb. Generally, many
people
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 ignore alarming signals of their body just until getting cautions from doctors. Young employees who work in offices frequently keep breakfasts to have a quick morning before going to work or have the meals late because of a busy timetable.
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, they have the ache of the stomach and in most
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, there would be no medicine that could cure entirely, which means they need to let those pains bother in rest of their whole
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. Whereas, other
people
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 who choose right ways of eating and follow strictly meal’s time, have a much stronger
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 with fewer matters in health.
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, medicine sometimes not only can not help but
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 can harm our health. There are lots of cases that have been noticed as proves of the bad effects of medicine abuse.
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, women tend to use products to lose weight without doing exercises. As a consequence, because of using fake products or overdosing, they could get some bad symptoms like diarrhoea or fever, some
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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