You recently spent a night in a hotel and had to put up with a great deal of noise very early in the morning because of a faulty central heating system. The manager promised to contact you regarding compensation but you still haven't heard from him. Write a letter to the hotel. In the letter describe the problem at the hotel explain what the manager had said at the time say what you want the manager to do.

Hello sir , I am writing
this
letter to express my dissatisfaction with your
hotel
services
especially
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with the central heating system which was not working properly. Basically, I booked your
hotel
on 24th June as I
was having
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an urgent international assignment on the
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app in the morning ,the reason for which I booked your
hotel
but
due to
noise from the heating ,system I was not able to
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my presentation properly and was not able to lock the deal which I was expecting. Let me explain the situation to you , at that time I talked to the manager of the
hotel
and he assured me that I
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be refunded my tariff but I haven’t got any confirmation till now .
Moreover
,disturbance
due to
the negligence of the
hotel
staff caused hindrance in my professional work.
Lastly
, I want
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designated payment should be made to my account as early as possible or I will have to take legal action against your firm.I want
that
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central heating system of the room in which I stayed should be replaced so that
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customers don’t face the same problem
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me and your staff should be vigilant in checking all the equipment in the room before allotting to any other customer. Awaiting to hear from your side soon. Yours faithfully, Jagjot.
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task response
The letter does not fully address the task requirements. It should focus more on the dissatisfaction caused by the faulty heating system and the lack of compensation. The writing needs to be more specific and clear regarding the desired outcome.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing lack formality and professionalism. Use a more appropriate salutation and closing for a formal letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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