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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can the people research this?

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These days in many countries , the most percentage of
people
 are interested in a historical topic
such
 as
house
 or building they live in . there are many reasons for
this
 and
in addition
 different ways for research about that . Overall, each building or
house
 has a story , when you decided to build a new
house
 you think about design ,
space
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spacious
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 rooms or other parts.
Then
 nowadays many houses are so old and many
generation
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generations
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 with various
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 live in that. Many
people
 , especially the youngest would like to have aware life, they want to know about
past
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the past
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 or history of their space
,
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because in their belief, previous
people
 that lived there have so
effect
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in
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 the energy of space.
On the other hand
, history of everything belongs to past and the best way to get information is talk to elder
people
 and another way studies historical book and documentary. In these ways many
people
 are interested in talking to old men or women
then
 compare the dataset. As result , in my idea is so important for us to
having
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 true information about our living place and our home , because we spend more time in different parts of our
house
 ,we should know about the past and the story of that.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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