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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factor contributes to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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 thought that the working time of
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 accounts for most of their life,
job
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satisfaction
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 plays an important role in personal wellbeing elements. From my perspective, there are 2 main factors affecting
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satisfaction
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.
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, the
salary
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level
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 is an essential element in the working pleasure of workers.
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 is because almost all employees want to have a good
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level
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 meeting their needs and help them have a better life.
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 environment
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 contributes directly to
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satisfaction
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. The reason is that a good environment including factors
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 as: friendly, sociable and helpful colleagues, the fair company policy and having many promotion chances helps workers feel comfortable and easily complete all their tasks.
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, it is hard for all workers to have the expectation of
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satisfaction
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.
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 is because high
salary
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jobs
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 demand a huge
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mount
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 of work and have much pressure.
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the fact
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fact
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 many managers give up thousand dollars
jobs
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 in big companies to do free
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 with a lower
salary
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level
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 in order not to be under a lot of pressure. Meanwhile, many comfortable
jobs
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 do not meet the required
salary
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 of employees. In conclusion, two important elements affecting
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satisfaction
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 are the
salary
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level
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 and the working environment. I firmly believe that the expectation of
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satisfaction
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 for all works is impossible.

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