What distinguishes young people from their parents' or grandparents' generation is a lack of physical exercise. Today's generation are spending far too long playing computer games, chatting aimlessly on social networking sites or simply watching TV, and too little time being active. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is a hot topic of discussion that young people like to spend their time in front TV while playing games or watching movies 
instead
 of doing any physical activities throughout the day. I totally disagree with 
this
 statement and I am going to explain my reasons in the following paragraphs. 
To begin
 with, Most     teenagers like to kill their time doing something that they like the most, for ,instance playing games, watching television or in some cases chatting with strangers is 
also
 a common thing   these days. The main reason why 
this
 generation chose technology over parents or grandparents is that both of them are either working throughout the day or in some cases they got divorced in their earlier years, 
hence
 to survive the feeling of loneliness younger kids take these steps, which definitely affect their body and as a , a result they become used to a sedentary lifestyle.  Moving
further
, another reason is that majority of the parents like to see their kids succeeding in academic studies. They force their kids to join tuition after they have done with their school hours ,
therefore
, most of the younger ones started gaining weight in the earlier years they are of life. I still remember back in India after 6 hours of school study my parents forced me to join extra two-hour study sessions and after that I
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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