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Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families To what extent do you agree or disagree

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recent years, it is commonly believed that
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family life is being harmed by the high speed and the pressure of contemporary lifestyles.
This
 essay strongly agrees with that statement. I believe that people are clearly having little quality
time
 for family and they usually have arguments with each other. On the one hand, the rapid pace and strain of nowadays life
leads
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 to less
time
 for family
members
 to be together. As a matter of fact, the overwhelming workloads make individual family
members
 spend most of their
time
 dealing with them, so they hardly have
time
 at their
home
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.
This
 happened to my uncle. He was a
maketer
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marketer
 working for a large company and the boss kept increasing his sales targets so he is always up to his ears in
deadline
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 that leaves him with very little
time
 for his wife and in the end, he separated.
On the other hand
, the
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 lifestyle and the pressure of everyday life exert a negative effect on people's physical and mental health, so they cause arguments among family
members
.
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other hand
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, when people come home late after a hustle day, tired, hungry, no longer do they be rational and loving enough to act properly with those around them, especially their kids. As the result,
this
 phenomenon leads to conflicts and disputes among family
members
. In conclusion, I totally agree that with the view that house living is heavily influenced by the pressures and hustle of modern society. I personally think
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the individual
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individual
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 should share joy, happiness and burden of everyday
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life
lives
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lifes
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 to create a good atmosphere for family living.
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