In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

I think in
first
world countries and societies there has been
a
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greater importance placed upon owning your own
home
rather than renting
one
due to the status it can represent But in my opinion
this
is not just restricted to
first
world countries, we now see it here where I am from through
people
judging you on the assets that you own. There are many reasons for
this
nowadays as it is more and more attractive to own your own
home
.
One
of the biggest attractions that it has to offer is the privacy and social status it brings.There are
also
long term benefits
such
as that it affords you the ability to raise a family in a comfortable environment and that properties are
a
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usually a sound investment.Another reason
for
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why
people
may prefer to own a
home
are the drawbacks associated with renting.
One
of these downsides would be that renting is a short term solution to a long term question. Another is the financial pressure that it may place upon
people
every month. I would say
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neither a positive nor a negative situation as there are ups and downs to both owning and renting. On the positive
side
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we could say that it allows
people
to have their own space, privacy and the opportunity to style and furnish their homes in their own way.
However
, if you rent a
home
you have much less responsibility than owning
one
. In a rental
situation
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the tenant is only responsible for paying the bills and taking minimal care of the property. Whereas
,
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owning a
home
you have to take the utmost care whilst living there and you are responsible for its upkeep and maintenance and any other things that may need to be upgraded over time. Overall I think is something that comes down to personal tastes and the society that you live in. Owning a
home
definitely has
it
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pluses but
also
has its downsides alongside it. I would say that it usually comes down to the mindset of the individual and how they perceive their status in society and what they are financially capable of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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