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Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places?

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child
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's youth is something that they need to experience in its entirety. Some people may argue that
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 can be achieved by them living in the cities, whilst others believe it can be done by them living in the countryside.
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, both have their pros and cons which shall be explained in the course of
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 essay. On one hand,
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 life has more resources for guidance,
child
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 education, much more complex socialization, and better preparation for school. It is much easier for
children
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 to grow up in the
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 to fit into the school system of activities because life in the
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 must be organized.
Children
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 from the
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 have many opportunities for various interests. The
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 is full of various events and all the modern technology surrounds them
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 available to them. How good it is or not, each parent decides what it’s best for his
child
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. Socializing in parks, in kindergarten, on birthdays is very important for
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. In preschool,
children
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 have a great need to connect with their peers.
Children
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 who live and grow up in the
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 have greater opportunities to attend cinemas,
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, playrooms, sports matches. Modern technology is more accessible to them, kids are educated faster and everything is more accessible to them in the media and technology. It is more likely that they will later fit in more easily with the standards of modern life because knowledge and dexterity in technological matters is the
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 step towards success in the business for which they will need it. By playing games on the computer,
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 develop different abilities, learn to read more easily
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 and learn a foreign language.
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,
children
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 living in the countryside are greater than
children
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’s eyes and minds can understand about growing up in the
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. Until starting school, a
child
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 should play, enjoy growing up freely, in his childhood. The
city
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 usually includes growing up with guidance, which we have, in kindergarten, in the park, through the media, all around us. The
village
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 stimulates in every
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 the imagination and interest in various activities. There is a huge difference between the
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 and the
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 in the winter when it snows. It stays in the
village
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 longer and stays white longer. There is still much more greenery in the
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, but
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 insects
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 as mosquitoes and flies.
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,
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 can get to know the charms of silence and the sounds of animals at night. In conclusion, one of the biggest differences between
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 from the
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 and
children
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 from the
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 is the possibility of choice.

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