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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world. Why is this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy?

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One of the highly controversial issues today is related to how humans utilize
energy
 resources. Over the years, solar
energy
 increasing becomes a prominent source of
energy
 among
the
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nations across the globe. From my perspective, there are reasons behind
this
 trend, as well as the presence of merits and drawbacks which will be elaborated
further
 in
this
 essay. I opine that there are two reasons why solar power is becoming a popular option.
To begin
 with, I believe that there are
people
 concerned
in
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 developing a sustainable world.
This
 is because there is a movement for
people
 to help conserve the environment and with that in mind, utilizing solar
energy
 as an efficient alternative
energy
 source is one of the plausible solutions some
people
 do to aid in the agenda.
In addition
, it may be effective in cutting monthly expenses in a household. Thanks to technological developments,
such
system
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capable
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 of yielding electrical
energy
that is
 sufficient to cover house needs, at a lower cost.
Moreover
, sunlight
energy
 has some merits. Possibly, it may lead to a decrease in
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harmful fuel
usage
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,
such
 as fossil fuels and nuclear power. If we change to use using more environmentally-friendly resources alternatives, it may yield
favorable
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 results.
Furthermore
,
people
 can spend the extra money
for
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 other things
instead
.
On the other hand
, one obvious drawback is that
this
 option is not practicable in countries with little or weak sunlight. Another is that cost of solar harnessing system installation could be prohibitively expensive for some low or average-income households. Concludingly, I believe that planet conservation and cost reduction are two causes why solar
energy
 becomes a viable choice despite the aforementioned possible disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable energy
  • Subsidies
  • Tax credits
  • Photovoltaic cells
  • Efficiency
  • Off-grid
  • Carbon footprint
  • Climate change
  • Initial investment
  • Energy security
  • Sustainability
  • Decarbonization
  • Grid parity
  • Feed-in tariff
  • Energy storage systems
  • Payback period
  • Net metering
  • Silicon panels
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