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In many countries today, there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

Nowadays, students who graduate from
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 and have a degree in education cannot find
work
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 in their nation.
This
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 essay will discuss what are the keys that cause unemployment and possible solutions to
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 problem.
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 with, there are two main factors why countries do not hire graduated students.
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, many nations face financial issues because of overpopulation which makes them cannot find enough money for workers. In the other
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, they have to lessen the position of employees to maintain their budgets for improving other parts.
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, some majors in the
university
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 have received tons of students.
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, if they graduate from the
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, it will have plenty of
people
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 who are unemployed because the government has not had enough positions for everyone. Another factor is that the development of high technologies
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 as robots. Some careers can be replaced by robots and they are working
work
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 more precise than humans.
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 why some task has less position.
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, cashiers in the USA were replaced by automatic cashiers.
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, there are some possible solutions to tackle
this
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 problem. The government should limit pupils in major in the
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 in order to reduce the number of graduated
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 from the same faculty.
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, the number of positions will nearly equal the number of highly qualified graduates. Another means is that high-quality
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 can go abroad to find a job
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 available and earns a high wage.
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, after Thai pupils graduate from
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, they travel to another country to find the proper
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 and have a good quality of life. In conclusion, the main cause of
people
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 does not have hiring since countries are lack positions in
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 and modern technologies can replace many tasks. In my opinion, the government should deal with
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 problem with the
university
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 or
people
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 can go to another nation for working

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • highly qualified graduates
  • employment market
  • job vacancies
  • mismatch of skills
  • economic downturn
  • globalization
  • outsourcing
  • technological advancements
  • market demand
  • skills gap
  • employment opportunities
  • recession
  • job growth
  • graduate unemployment
  • career prospects
  • qualifications
  • relevant experience
  • job market trends
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