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What distinguishes young people from their parents' or grandparents' generation is a lack of physical exercise. Today's generation are spending far too long playing computer games, chatting aimlessly on social networking sites or simply watching TV, and too little time being active. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Younger generations these days spend an ample amount of time on social
media
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 or other indoor
activities
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 like chatting and watching TV. I strongly disagree with
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 fact because there are a variety of physical
activities
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 like workshops, online
classes
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 which facilitates
children
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 to keep fit just by staying at home. To commence with, there are various type of
activities
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 conducted which enables
children
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 to remain active.
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, online
classes
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 which are scheduled on weekends helps
children
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 in meeting new
people
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 and
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 in keeping themselves fit.
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, the Zumba
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 are conducted online every weekend to keep the younger
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 engaged.
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, marathon competitions have increased nowadays and have become a trend. These kinds of
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 have a myriad of kids as participants.
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, during the times of grandparents, they only had the opportunity to meet
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 in person but through
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 marathons and ,workshops
children
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 meet more and more
people
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 across the world, just by being at home and by accessing social
media
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.
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,
children
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 nowadays have started learning things online and not all
children
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 have the privilege to watch TV and scroll through social
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.
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, Physical training
classes
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 are nowadays converted to online exercise
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.Unlike other
children
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 poor
children
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 still do not have access to much online stuff and end up playing outside.So, not all of them remain inactive.Yet another example, is that in China even the kids are trained to perform gymnastics as perfectly as Olympic players. To conclude, it is indeed true that today's generation has become more active on social
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.
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, there is an equal number of
children
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 who tend to get their physical exercises done using apps like Instagram,Facebook.
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, the fact that today's generation spends more time with social
media
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 rather than on physical exercises is not true.
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