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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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In today's
world
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, the use of technology is ever increasing.
People
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in
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all over the
world
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 share the same
information
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. I totally agree that contemporary technology is creating a single
world
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culture
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. It is now much easier to communicate with
people
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 who are far away. Modern transportation,
TV
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 and
also
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 the internet are bringing
to
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people
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 closer together.
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, almost every family has
their
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 private
TV
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. It is connected with
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.
TV
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 programs can be received anywhere in the
world
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. Now
people
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 in every part of the
world
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 can watch all the same
TV
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 programs. When
people
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 see the same news and entertainment programs, they contribute to the development of
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single
world
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culture
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.
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, if we look at the internet,
people
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 have access to
information
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 and news from all over the
world
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. They can communicate easily with
people
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 who are far away and exchange
information
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each
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 other. When
people
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 share
the
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information
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 on the internet, they become under the same cultural influence. They move toward the creation of
a
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single
world
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culture
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.
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, as regards modern transportation, a trip to a foreign country becomes easily. Now
people
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 from all different places are more together than before. They can see how
people
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 in other countries dress, eat and spend their free time.
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, they can adopt some of the customs.
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for
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the
developing
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 of
a
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single
world
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culture
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. In conclusion, these types of communication technology have brought
people
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 from all over the
world
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 closer together.
People
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 these days have more opportunities to share ideas and
information
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. In
this
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 way, they are coming under the same cultural influence. So,
a
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single
world
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culture
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 is being created.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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