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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter - explain why you would like the job - give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ - say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing the letter to apply for the position of a short term live-in caregiver, published
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 week in one of the popular Australian family magazines that you have asked for your six-year-old baby. I am really keen on that role as my passion to be a primary school teacher soon. I have had an experience of looking after children especially under five to eight years old due to my younger siblings who are at that age. I love to stay with children because they are a bundle of joy and
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 why I took care of children when I was in my hometown. I just finished my thesis which is specializing in the subject of kid behaviour who are under ten years old, so I am confident enough to take care of your teenager to be a trustworthy babysitter in a short period of time. I am currently in Australia that my uncle invited me to visit around before I get into working life. I may be visiting tourist attraction places, tasting local food and having memories of local cultures as well as lifestyles of Australians. I will be
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The phrase following the intransitive verb waiting seems to be missing a preposition. Consider adding one.

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 the good news from you and hoping to get a chance for looking after your precious youth soon. Yours faithfully, Honey Linn

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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