The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Nowadays, it is concerned about the development of
technology
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, which may
contributes
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to a well-being disparity between the rich and poor people, while I allege that the advancement of
technology
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is able to reduce the gap among
population
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. In
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essay, I will
eloborate
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elaborate
both
viewsides
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view sides
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, and describe my perspective. On the one hand, It is true that innovation can consolidate the livelihood's disparity between
mankinds
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mankind
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because rich peoples have enough money to afford the
technology
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to facilitate their life
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as
luxuary
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luxury
cars, the newest
smart phone
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, and even buying the modern
technology
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to generate more income, whereas poor people cannot even afford the food to
fulfill
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their stomach. To illustrate
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, the kids who have
a
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weathy
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wealthy
parents can purchase the
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computer, which cost around one hundred thousand baht for mining bitcoin and generating a million baht, while the poor kids do not have money to buy even lunch.
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, the difference
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well-being between these two
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will be more and more increased due to the accessibility of the
technology
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.
On the contrary
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, the advancement of
technology
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provides
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educational opportunity for all students resulting in the reduction in human's disparity.
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, the internet enables students all over the world to access
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knowledges
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knowledge
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resources, and study via online classes, regardless of the tuition fee. Obviously, the university of people, where teenagers can online learn with eminent professors from the prestigious universities for free, provide the degree in several study fields to a thousand of students across the world even in Africa. Due to
the
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technology
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, getting a degree without paying any fees is possible. In summary,
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the innovation can increase the financial gap among
population
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the population
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as the persons who can access the
technology
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get more benefits, I strongly believe that the
technology
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are
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the promising methods to decrease
this
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gap by providing the opportunity in
term
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of education.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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