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Some people say that no one should do the same job forever , while others believe that doing the same job is beneficial for the individual , Company and society . Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #job #company #society
Job
 hopping is the new trend . A few years ago , it was a term and it was highly frowned upon . It was a norm to stick one
job
 to grab a pension and retire . Changing
job
 frequently
it
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is not good for employees , but once or twice time changing a
job
 it's beneficial . I shall put forth my argument to support my view in the following paragraph .
Firstly
 , there have many advantages to
change
a
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job
 . Employees can achieve a ton of experience by changing their workplace . An
employee
 who has gained many experiences can smoothly adapt to any sort of
the
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workplace . Sometimes
employee
's don'
t
 satisfy with their work for
this
 reason they have to
change
 their profession ,
job
 satisfaction is very important
,
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if
a
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employee
don'
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t
 feel safe in the workplace he can'
t
 work properly . Nowadays , everything is so expensive especially in the city for
this
 reason people can'
t
 meet their needs with their salary and they have to alter their professional life . Sometimes people have to move to another city's for many reasons and they have to leave their
job
 and seek a new
job
 .
Secondly
 , there have some demerits of
job
-hopping . Employers don'
t
 like an
employee
 who changes his
job
 frequently because they think he is directionless and disloyal . Companies have to train these employees
then
 they can join in which is waste of time and money . In my opinion , we should
change
 our
job
 for appropriate reasons , we should not
change
 our profession for money . To sum up ,
job
-hopping is good but if a person changes his professional life two or three times in a year which is harmful to the person and company .
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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  • personal growth
  • self-discovery
  • skill acquisition
  • adaptability
  • versatility
  • stagnation
  • expertise
  • specialization
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  • company culture
  • teamwork
  • cohesion
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  • continuity
  • long-term planning
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