In many countries women no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring.To what extent do you agree?

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Financial security is something that every individual craves. The ability to decide their fate.
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is the case for both men and
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, some people believe
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is a selfish notion on the part of
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, whilst others believe that it is only right for them to feel
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way. I agree, with the notion of
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choosing not to marry and will substantiate my reasons in the course of
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essay. For starters,
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choose not to marry for the sake of their careers. They feel that if they do, they will be pegged back, not only by personal commitments but
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by colleagues at work and managers who will at the time prevent them from promotions as the belief is that the
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will eventually leave to take care of the children. The financial security that
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obtain from working, allows them to live their life on their terms, and the fact of the matter is why shouldn't they.
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, my friend in Bangalore who is 36 years old, is currently being bombarded by her friends, parents, and relatives to get married, because she is past the age where she will be able to get good options for husbands.
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, she works as a manager of a start-up company and is doing very well for herself. Alternately, the problem of
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not choosing to get married, means there is skewness in the ratio of men as compared to
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who wish to get married.
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will result in many men moving to other locations to get married, or resulting in them
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not tying the knot.
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, the more
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choose not to marry, it will cause a dent in the birth rates of a city, and slowly the reduction in the population. Once
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happens, many sectors will have to rely on migrant workers for fulfilling the job market requirements. In conclusion, no man can live as an island, and
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the requirement for human companionship is inevitable. The right of a woman to be unmarried is their fundamental right,
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, I feel
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is a decision that they need to think about, because later in life they will not have anyone to take care of them.
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