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More and more people are using computers and electric devices to access information, so there is no need for printed books, magazines and newspaper. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

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The internet has brought a revolution in the modern-day schooling experience. Switching papers and other printed materials with
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 and tablets may help the
students
 to do assignments and
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, but the use of
laptops
 for exams might not be efficient.
Firstly
, the use of
laptops
 and tablets helps
the
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students
 in many ways
while
 studying.
For example
, if a student needs to write a thesis or a paper for which he needs to refer to multiple sources, using books would be taxing and physically demanding compared to searching on the Internet where we would get direct links to multiple references on a single search.
Also
,
students
 can quickly refer back to any video lectures that are recorded and posted on their school website
while
 preparing for exams or even
while
 doing assignments if they
get
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 any doubts.
On the other hand
, using
laptops
 for examinations might help
the
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students
 to cheat in their exams. As most of the study materials are open on the Internet and are accessible to everyone all the time,
students
 might directly copy the answers from
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, rather than
solving
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 the problem in the test. These issues can be avoided when in the paper-based
examination
. In the paper-based
examination
, the student's knowledge will be accurately evaluated, as the risk of cheating is reduced.
To conclude
, the use of
laptops
 and tablets
have
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 some pros as they allow the
students
 to complete the school work
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, and
helps
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 them understand the concepts better,
whereas
 it
also
 has some cons, as it might allow the
students
 to cheat in the
examination
, which defeats the purpose of the
examination
.
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