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Your Australian friend is thinking about making a short visit to your country, and intends to visit a particular tourist attraction during his/her stay. However, you feel that it would be better for your friend to visit a different tourist attraction. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • recommend a good time for your friend to visit your country • say why it would be better to visit a different tourist attraction • suggest that you and your friend meet

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Based on the telephone conversation we had
last
 week, I understand that you will be in Kenya towards the end of September, and you will be visiting Gedi Ruins in Mombasa and Malindi.
Although
 these areas have the best beaches and are full of history, I would suggest that you consider making a trip to Masai Mara national park. It is one of the well-known wild parks in Kenya and beyond. It is famous for safari and a wide variety of species, so it will be
life-changing
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 experience for you. You will have
chance
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 to see wild cats like lions and leopards in their natural habitat. By the way, the best time to tour Masai Mara is mid of
next
 month as there will be wildebeest migration from Serengeti. There are local travel firms that organize for transport, food and accommodation, so don't worry about the logistics. Before
then
, we need to meet so that we can look for
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cheaper options.
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