Many people are working longer hours. Why is it happening. What problem may this cause to people

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time
of
people
varies a lot according to which region they
work
in.Many
people
have been working extensively these days.In
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I will explain
reasons
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the reasons
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of
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this
trend with what
this
trend is causing to
people
. A major issue of devoting
long
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time
at
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work
is
opulent
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lifestyle.Life standards of
people
are inflating significantly leading them to spend more money on expensive goods
such
as garments and footwear. To accomplish these desires
people
work
intensively at their
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workplaces
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work places
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workplaces
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.
For instance
, my elder brother
convets
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converts
to have
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clothes
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cloths
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clothes
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and shoes from brands like Gucci and Supreme which are not cheaper and value for money ,
however
, the brother works intensive hours just to enrich his lifestyle.
This
is a vital reason leading
people
to
work
lately at their
work places
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workplaces
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.
This
trend is
inevitablely
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inevitably
inevitable
influencing
people
's mental health and upsurging anxiety and stress.Working late often
lead
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to less
time
with family and more
time
for
work
,
this
,
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creates stress
evironment
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environment
where they
work
in. In China
for
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example , a working rule has been set up which is called 977.
This
rule covey
people
's working habits which are 9 hours a day 7 days a week without any break. After
this
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law enforcement workers have to
spent
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more hours at
work
and if they deny it they got fired for it.Due to
this
rule
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China saw a substantial upsurge in workers
commiting
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committing
commuting
sucide
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suicide
.For
this
reason , Long
expanditure
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expenditure
at
work
is directly affecting
people
's mental health. To conclude ,
appetite
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the appetite
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of
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living
opulent
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an opulent
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lifestyle is leading to
work
more than ever ,
although
, it is causing devastating consequences to
people
's mental health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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