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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial, perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

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Children
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 these days are pressurizing either from the academic, social or commercial point of view. In
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First,
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there are academic pressures on
children
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. Parental pressure is one of them where they force
children
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 to excel in technical subjects. They follow
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 to get a good job in the future. For that, they may call their teachers or lecturers and request their
children
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 to reach a desired academic achievement;
consequently
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, school or college teachers may force their
children
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 by giving lots of assignments and homework;
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, students face a lot of strain from their
parents
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.
Furthermore
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,
children
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 may encounter social and commercial pressures. Socially,
children
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 of today are in a huge dilemma. The main reason is the discrepancy in culture adoption by both
parents
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 and
children
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;
as a result
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, youth may dispute with their
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 in terms of culture. What is more, is the stress
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 by their peers. For example,
children
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 when observing the cutting-edge models of mobile phones
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intend to purchase them. When they are unable to do so, they get stressed. There are some solutions to solve the provided problems.
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parents
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 should recognize the pupils’ interests and promote them
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 their wishes so that they can reach
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their career goals with ease;
additionally
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,
parents
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 can share their personal experiences so that
children
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 can listen to them. Whenever
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 they try to provide explanations for their statements they may be harmonious with their
parents
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.
To conclude
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, there is no doubt that
children
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 experience lots of pressure;
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, we could ameliorate
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 by following some steps mentioned in previous paragraphs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressure
  • globalized world
  • competitive education system
  • social media influences
  • cyberbullying
  • commercial pressures
  • aggressive marketing
  • materialistic desires
  • peer pressure
  • high expectations
  • standardized testing
  • quantifiable performance
  • stress and anxiety
  • extracurricular achievements
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