families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system

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Some people agree with paying the educational taxes for
families
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who send their
children
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to a private
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and some others are not. In my
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paying the
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for supporting
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education
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system
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is not mandatory for
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who send their sons and girls to non-public schools. In
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thing that I want to say about my opinion is about
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fee
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of private schools. In
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the cost of
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type of
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is much more than other types.
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, parents
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children
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go to
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these schools pay a lot of money without using
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any governmental services.
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they can do not pay any additional cost for supporting the state
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who send their
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to a private
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pay the cost of the learning process of teachers who teach in that
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which they graduated by government
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is opened the
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's needs.
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is a type of financial activity.
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of his profit and his activity
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the
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who are using his services with sending their students to his
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must not pay any
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for anything which relate to
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education
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of
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. According to these two reasons I
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with paying any taxes fo educational
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by
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who send their
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to a private
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because they pay a lot of money for buying or using
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services which are prepared by
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the government
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or other public organisations and
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the
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of opening a private
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as an investing activity was
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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