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It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. Do you agree that this is the main cause of juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation?

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Nowadays there is an upward trend in the juvenile delinquency rate. Some people say
this
 is because of the flourishing in the
media
 industry which sometimes contains violent content, and
such
 unhealthy contexts can influence immature
children
's thoughts. In my opinion, I totally agree with
this
 idea and think that it is better to have
parents
' accompanying when
children
 are watching TV or using social
media
;
furthermore
, violent content on these
media
 should be strictly restricted by the authority.
To begin
 with, the
media
 should take the greatest responsibility for juvenile crime because they spread inadequate information without categorizing their users.
As a result
,
such
 bad information can easily be seen by
children
 who are mentally immature and have less knowledge to recognize things' right and wrong.
For example
, according to the authority's research, in
Taiwan
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 up to 70 per cent of students in elementary schools will imitate public figures' ways of speaking and their
behaviors
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, for just wanting to be like them.
Consequently
, some bad behaviours
such
 as bullying or discriminating can happen in the school or on the internet. In order to deal
these
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 problems mentioned above,
parents
' accompanying and strict censorship from the government will be important all the more.
Firstly
,
parents
 have to spend some time watching TV or browsing websites with their
children
, taking
this
 opportunity to assist them with developing the ability to tell right from wrong.
Therefore
, even
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thought
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unhealthy behaviour or speaking has been exposed to the
children
, the harmful effect on them can be enormously minimized.
In addition
 to
this
, comprehensive censorship from the government is able to effectively curb juvenile delinquency because
this
 is the easiest and quickest way to thoroughly eradicate inadequate messages on all kinds of
media
. In conclusion, unhealthy content on the
media
 should be blamed for encouraging
children
 to commit crimes, and
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proper education from
parents
 and a stringent regulation introduced by the government can ease
this
 problem.
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