In many countries the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think this is and what can be done about it?

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In many countries the level of crime is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. Why do you think this is and what can be done about it?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In the present day, remote work has become more popular due to technological advancement and global pandemics. Some suggest that this enhances employee's productivity and ensures work-life balance, while others argue it could lead to loneliness and working overtime.

An increasing number of professional, such as teachers and doctors are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What are the reasons for this trend? What effect does it have on the countries professionals are leaving?

- Many high street shops have gone out of business in recent years. Why do you think this has happened? Is it a positive or negative development?

The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that were more suitable and livable for people in those times than they are now. What problems will this cause? What should be done to solve this?

Some people believe that if police force carries guns, it can encourage a higher level of violence. To what extent do you agree or disagree?