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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a common belief that aided community programmes
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 are free of charge should be obligated in high school schedules.
However
, there is a more persuasive opinion that
students
 should concentrate on their duties, improving knowledge,
instead
 of taking too much
time
 to join other
activities
. Analysis
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 would show a comprehensive idea. On one side of the argument, participating
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 unpaid community service assist children from all ages to approach soft skills
such
 as communicating, or
publicly
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 speaking.
Moreover
,
students 's
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 emotions could be developed significantly throughout charity programmes. According to
a
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recent research,
students
 who take part in youth unions or associations would have
extroverse
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extroversive
extroversion
 characteristics as their mentality and sympathy have been built strongly after experimented
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series of helpful society
activities
.
Nevertheless
,
on the other hand
,
students
 should devote their
time
 to finishing compulsory academic programmes. Mandatory outdoor
activities
 would take too much
time
, especially, coinciding with their subject schedules.
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, they immediately
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the
students's
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 final results, often in a negative way.
Additionally
, those
activities
 become pressures on their teacher, their reports would be much better if their
students
 dedicated more
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 the service while their duties are adopting
knowledges
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knowledge
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.
For instance
, my high school once
time
 required us to join the freshmen soldiers welcome meeting, half of our class had to skip the subjects
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that morning. Fortunately,
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 had a chance to stay
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 the classroom. To conclude, being members of community services would play a part in
bulding
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building
 strong gestures among
students
, but they should not be contributed much
time
 as
students
 have to finish their class
firts
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first
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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