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Nowadays, families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to this. Explain the reasons for this and discuss any possible effects it may have on society.

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There was a time in the past, where everyone used to come together and tell stories about their whole day while sitting at the dinner table. These days, people like to live alone where they leave their
families
 behind and after some time they become used to it.
This
 essay shall delve into the reasons for
this
 phenomenon and
also
 going to us the idea about its effects on our society.
To begin
 with, majority of the youngsters move from their house the time they turned sixteen
hence
 after living alone for a long one becomes independent and don't like to share their personal space with anyone. A survey conducted in 2016 showed some dramatic results, where 57 per cent of youth in Canada chose to live alone
instead
 of living with their parents and they gave internal family issues as the main cause of
this
 trend. Back in the days, these issues were less common but nowadays, children like to live alone because they think that alone will going to help them in future.
However
,
this
 trend could possibly affect our society forever. One of which is
families
 may not develop a good bond with other family members and
hence
 rise trust issues which may lead to internal family spats.
For instance
, a family of ten were living together one day they had a fight over the business, like whose going to become the
next
 owner of the company
as a result
, all three brothers moved with their
families
 from the house. People don't see the negative effects of
this
 trend they think that it's a wise choice to move on with their family while leaving everything behind. In the
last
, folks who like to live in nuclear
families
 may never understand the meaning of family because that's in all those years they lived on their own without any family support.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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