Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be eliminated?

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of citizens suggest that the high levels of explicit
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damage caused to young unprepared minds, which can easily be reduced by
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advisory. Some
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psychological damage or even traumatize a child. Most parents pay little attention to the
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of a movie or age restriction before watching it, so R-rated films can be accidentally seen by a toddler or a teenager. Serious topics, blood or cruelty
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on the screen can actually
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brain. Some might agree that most of their childhood fears share a plot of a character with a movie they viewed unsupervised.
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horror movie scenarios. An easy and obvious solution is more parental advisory. In general, more awareness of
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child ends up consuming is important in parenting. There is no possible way of guarding a youngster
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any explicit
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of
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for children-friendly
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psychologically
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damaged younger generation can be high levels of violence in cinematography, which can be reduced by increasing parental advisory for
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  • desensitization
  • empathy
  • aggressive behaviors
  • imitation
  • antisocial behavior
  • normalization
  • climate of fear
  • perceptions
  • mental health
  • aggression
  • emotional regulation
  • trauma-related symptoms
  • age ratings
  • critical viewing skills
  • nonviolent entertainment
  • film industry
  • regulate
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