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Some people think that the government should fund music, dance and art lessons for children. Others think that they should be funded by private businesses or by children’s families. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Government
 funding is very important to an economy, allocation of funds should be based on the need and
growth
 of the society. Few people think that dancing, musical and artistic studies should be given major preference, while others think that private ventures and
children
's families will require more funding. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views and elaborate on why private
businesses
 and
children
's families should be funded by the
government
. When it comes to studies
government
 funding is very important, which educates
children
 and make them aware of various possibilities. Focusing on art, music and dance will make students
to
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learn the culture and socialize with other people, leads to
growth
 in their circle of life. Participation in events in various parts of the world will make them
to
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get to know about various religions and leads the way to spread our cultural values. Eventually by funding in
this
 area will focus more on spreading
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cultural heritage. A nation's
growth
 is determined by its economy, funding in
businesses
 and family schemes will assure them. Any business requires funding,
although
 a person running a business will spend to make profits.
Government
 should
also
 encourage them by giving some beneficial schemes, which helps them to take a loan and improve their business.
Children
's families who are in desperate need of funds will look after some support from the
government
 so that they may spend money on studies and in their needs of education.
This
 may lead to the proper education of students and economic benefits from them. Overall
this
 will make the country more stable in terms of economic
growth
.
Nevertheless
, everything should be focused on from the
government
 perspective. In my opinion is, the
government
 should fund more on the
businesses
 and family schemes, which will make a student educate well and allow him to work on his idea and innovate new ideas.
Therefore
 hereby I conclude that funding for
businesses
 and
children
's family
growth
 will benefit all.
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