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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#country #language
Speaking is the best way to express our
idea
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whereas
 every nation has at least a particular
language
 to convey the relevant message in a proper way.
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 in a
country
 where the
language
 is not native to the person can create severe conundrum in social
as well as
 practical.
Hence
, familiar with a foreign
language
 will facilitate communication among other nations by avoiding
language
 barriers.
In
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one
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 hand,
people
 who are involved in studies or
profession
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professions
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in
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overseas should be aware
about
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of
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 the
language
 which
native
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is native
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 to the relevant
country
 in order to acquire
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 outcome. If it is not so, it will create poor interaction between other parties which leads
isolation
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to isolation
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.
In
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Japan which considered
as
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a leading
country
 in the world is
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 only Japanese as a
language
. About 3% of Sri
Lankan
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Lankans
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are
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 engaged in either learning or jobs in Japan should have at least primitive knowledge of Japanese and those who
are
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lack
of
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the knowledge will have to give up their opportunity
due to
language
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the language
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 barrier which affect poor bond among
people
.
In
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other
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 hand,
language
 will facilitate to
communicate
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an
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 idea in the proper way.
Hence
 different countries having various cultures which
are facilitate
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 socialization should be followed by all the
people
 who are living in a particular
country
. Social activities
such
 as charity
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work
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, funds,
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and entertainments
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entertainments
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entertainment
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 will elevate the lifestyle of
people
 and those who
are having
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have
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an
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inadequate
language
 will be unable to
having
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such
 privileges which leads
practical
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to practical
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 issues. Some
researches
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research
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have
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has
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 shown that
people
 with
language
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a language
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 barrier have
loose
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lost
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 their rights by 15% where
language
 fluency is the key factor to having rights. Staying
in
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overseas where using a foreign
language
 has a negative effect on social and practical. I strongly believe it is mandatory to learn at least a foreign
language
 other than the mother tongue in order to prevent
language
 barriers and it will facilitate a sophisticated lifestyle
in
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all over the world.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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