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Band 2.5

It is more important to earn a lot of money than to have a satisfying job

#money #job
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Nowadays people are looking for well-payed jobs rather
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than
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 satisfying. But is it Good to do
boring
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a boring
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job
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 to earn money
.
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 Some people believe that money will make you happy. I completely disagree with
this
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 and in
this
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essay
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 I will support my opinion with some examples. The reason why I think that people should do
work
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 that
satisfy’s
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satisfies’s
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 them is
fast
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the fast
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lose
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loss
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 of interest
to
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in
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work
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. What I mean by
this
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 is that
then
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 you are doing that
work
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 where you were not interested the only whiny that hold’s you from fired quitting is money.
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, you are leaving from we'll-paid because of the blah
work
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. The
second
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 reason is that it is much easy to become professional in
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work
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the work
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 that you are really into. In other, you can do your favourite
job
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 for a long time and do not get bored, so you spend more hours and get more experience on your
job
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, it will increase your chance to get a promotion at
work
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. I think that it can even more profitable than a well-paid
job
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. To sum up it
us
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is
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 much better to have
an
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 satisfyIng
job
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 than well-paid
work
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. Personally, I believe that we should do what we want and do not look at salary
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