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It is more important to earn a lot of money than to have a satisfying job

#money #job
Nowadays people are looking for well-payed jobs rather
then
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 satisfying. But is it Good to do
boring
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job
 to earn money
.
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 Some people believe that money will make you happy. I completely disagree with
this
 and in
this
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 I will support my opinion with some examples. The reason why I think that people should do
work
 that
satisfy’s
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 them is
fast
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the fast
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lose
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 of interest
to
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work
. What I mean by
this
 is that
then
 you are doing that
work
 where you were not interested the only whiny that hold’s you from fired quitting is money.
As a result
, you are leaving from we'll-paid because of the blah
work
. The
second
 reason is that it is much easy to become professional in
work
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 that you are really into. In other, you can do your favourite
job
 for a long time and do not get bored, so you spend more hours and get more experience on your
job
, it will increase your chance to get a promotion at
work
. I think that it can even more profitable than a well-paid
job
. To sum up it
us
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 much better to have
an
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 satisfyIng
job
 than well-paid
work
. Personally, I believe that we should do what we want and do not look at salary
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