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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

#city #traffic #congestion
As every year the city develops and becomes more and more
traffic
 jams are urgent problems. Sometimes there are cases when a person gets stuck in
traffic
 congestions for several hours to get home. One of the major causes of
traffic
 congestion is
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car
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. They usually occur on large roads, where many
people
 go to work or school.
Moreover
, it’s happen because of incompetent
people
 who don’t know how to drive properly or because they are in an alcoholic state. Bad weather
also
 affects
car
 accident, as rain or icy road prevents the driver from focusing on the pavement. Another factor is a narrow road. In big cities, there are a lot of
people
 who drive a
car
. That’s why roads are clogged with cars because of lack of space. To solve
this
 problem, it is necessary to introduce an additional tax for
people
 who have a
car
 and spend them to improve the country's infrastructure.
Furthermore
, it is mandatory to make the driving test more difficult in order to reduce the
car
 accidents that happen every day in the world. The best option for solving
this
 problem is public transport. Since public transport is efficient, economical and reliable,
this
 is the best way to reduce congestion. It is
also
 not expensive and there are different prices for students and seniors. All the costs associated with owning a
car
 are replaced with one simple transportation value. In conclusion,
traffic
 jams are an urgent problem, but there is a solution to
this
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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