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Whoever controls the media also controls the opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little that can be done to rectify this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
 who have authority over
media
 can control
behaviour
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the behaviour
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 and thoughts of the
people
.
This
 can be a debatable statement and opinions may vary
accordingly
.
To begin
with
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 it is important for
people
 to be aware of what is going on in the
nation
 and worldwide.
Media
 is that organisation
which
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that
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 gives us insight about What, When Where and How something is happening and what are the negative and positive impacts of
such
 events. These are only some aspects that
media
 cover and without
this
coverage
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 it is very difficult for a
nation
 to function.
Also
,
media
 is considered to be one of the pillars of any democracy and immense tension on a pillar can have a negative impact
over
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on
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 the whole
nation
. But is it true that many powerful organisations and
people
 have
media
 on their leash? With no proper
evidence
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 it is hard to comment on that. Whereas some
suggests
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suggest
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 that
media
 is only reporting what they are asked to report and not what they are supposed to report. Giving a clear autonomy to the powerholders by helping them hide their wrongdoings or involvement in criminal activities. At the end of the day, it is very important for the
media
 to hold their moral grounds and not work for anyone but for the
people
 of the
nation
. By keeping them well
inform
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informed
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 about the event that
are
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is
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 taking place. So that they can choose between right and wrong when the time is right.
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