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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people supp ose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays abortion has
increases
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 rapidly and becomes a controversial topic in society
this
 is because of illiteracy and
also
 of immaturity.In order to avoid miscarriage
people
 should use prevention
methods
 as we all are well known about the sayings like prevention is better than cure.Before doing
such
 kind of action
people
 should think about whether they are doing right. Every individual has
their
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 own perspective and opinion regarding the issue.Some
people
 are opposing
this
,as they feel it is a crime.Killing the fetus before giving birth is a criminal activity according to the
people
 who are opposing it.While the others had their personal problems regarding their financial status.According to my opinion miscarriage is a criminal kind of thing as they are killing the unborn baby. On the other ,hand government has to propose some of the legal
methods
such
 as it is necessary only when they are unable to feed the baby.And
also
 the government has to educate illiterate
people
 on feticide.,
However
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people
 must be aware of sex and its prevention
methods
. To conclude that abortion should be accepted even though it is a serious issue if and only if there is a strong reason and high-budget evidence.
People
 should be motivated by themselves on sex and contraception
methods
.
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