Traffic abd housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies and factories andtheir employees to the country side. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Traffic
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weel
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as
accomodation
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accommodation
problems,
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the most common problem, especially in major cities.
Thus
, the government's management is
necessalythings
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necessary things
to do. Some people believe that moving huge industries and thair workforces to
countryside
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will
decreas
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decrease
these issues. In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support my agreement will be discussed in detail.
To begin
with, I strongly believe that every town
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the
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limitation of
population
.
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,
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population
issue is founded in many
largecities
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large cities
should be solved by decreasing the
population
.
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of people cause
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lower housing's demand, so the price of accommodation falls
accordingly
which is
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affordable price. People is to have more space for living
such
as living area, workspace,
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exercising
area and library due to the ratio of the individual's space is increased by decreasing divisor.
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,
Thailand
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, many large industries are moved to Prachinburi which is larger land and less cost of living than Bangkok recently.
Additionally
, lower using vehicle could solve
thetraffic
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the traffic
issues which are
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combined
with
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an accident
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,
traffic
jam and broken road. Especially, in major
cities
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many workforces usually use
personal
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the personal
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car
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cars
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to go to their factories.
This
maylead
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may lead
to heavy
traffic
jam
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or
terrible
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a terrible
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accident
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sometimes.
Moreover
, all-time
resorce
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resource
record
transportations that always use heavy lorries can drop the road's lifetime. In Bangkok Thailand, it has the same problems and
also
includes inadequate road
problem
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problems
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,
hence
the government declares the policy for motivating about displacing to another less town as Ratchaburi. In summary, Decreasing the
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overpopulation
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over
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overpopulation
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population
by displacing the large factories and their labours can solve the housing and
traffic
issues and is to make life better in future.
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