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Some people believe that teenager should always follow the examples of older people, whereas some believe it is natural in teenager to challenge what old people say. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is believed by some that the young generation should listen to their father or mother what they say, while others argue that it is normal to raise questions of what adults teach them. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both perspectives. I,
however
, side with the latter view.
To begin
 with, the key reason given by those who think it is always better for adolescents to obey their parents or grandparents is their real-life experiences as they are more experienced and have had seen all the situations.
Therefore
, they are in a better position to advise their children.
This
 can help teenagers in taking the right decisions and learn from their parent's mistakes.
For instance
, when a teen is confused about choosing a college or finding employment, the advice of their experienced person can be really helpful.
On the other hand
, there are other sections of people who consider that children should not always obey what their parents say
instead
 of that they must raise questions to make independent in their lives. According to them, decisions should not be imposed on any youth as it can make them extroverts and shy. Adults should understand of his/her child interest what he wants to become and achieve in life.
For example
, if Sachin Tendulkar was not allowed to play cricket, he may probably not have become the number one batsman in the world. I believe that teens should be allowed to sit with their guardians and discuss their ambitions, issues at school/ college or at the workplace. Parents should listen to their child and try to understand what his child is going through
instead
 of arguing and imposing their rights on them. Not allowing teens to speak up can leads to devastating circumstances like suicidal thoughts, anxiety attacks and so on. To conclude, I would like to reiterate that young people should give the liberty to make their own decisions in order to become independent people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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