Many people believe that television programs are of no value for children. Do you agree? Why or why not? Provide reasons and examples to support your response

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Entertainment broadcasted by

television

provider

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is the most universal entertainment that can be enjoyed by people from any background.

However

, some

party

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argued that

television

programs

bring no value

for

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children

. I personally disaccord with that statement because of the following reasons which will be shed in the following paragraphs below.

Television

programs

are the source of information and

knowledge

for

children

Children

can learn skills and

knowledge

through

television

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a television

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program

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programs

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For instance

, when I was a child I learned

mandarin

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the mandarin

a mandarin

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language by watching

Chinese

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a Chinese

the Chinese

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television

program

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programs

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. Today, I can speak mandarin without

learn

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it in school or courses.

Thus

television

programs

provide

value

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the value

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of learning for

children

Moreover

, please bear in mind that not all

television

programs

provide bad influences for people and

children

. There are still several educational

programs

broadcasted

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television

For example

animal

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the animal

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planet channel always shares about animal activities and their

behaviors

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. It introduces

children

with

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the

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variety of animals and their characteristics. Not only that, but

national

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the national

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geographic channel

also

shows

knowledge

about our earth. Through those channels, young adolescents are able to learn

knowledge

that is

not taught in school.

Further

television

programs

help

children

especially toddler to operate their

mind

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minds

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and become interactive. It may enhance their imagination and creativity. To exemplify, my nephew who is currently 7 years old is very creative, it is because when she was a toddler she spent days watched

television

programs

such

cartoon

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cartoons

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and kids reality shows. Based on the foregoing, even though some

television

programs

provide bad influences

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people and especially

children

but it cannot be said that

television

programs

provide no value for

children

. In fact,

television

programs

are really helpful for the development of

children

However

, supervision from parents is still needed.

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4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Grammar mistakes
 

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Many people believe that television programs are of no value for children. Do you agree? Why or why not? Provide reasons and examples to support your response

Include an introduction and conclusion

Young people are getting influenced by their friends than their parents and teachers. Do you agree. Give reasons with examples from knowledge or personal experience.

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature and history of their own country, rather than the literature and history of other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

2. In many countries, people are living in a “throwaway society” where things are used for a short time and thrown away. What are the causes of this and what problems does it lead to?