Many people believe that television programs are of no value for children. Do you agree? Why or why not? Provide reasons and examples to support your response

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Entertainment broadcasted by
television
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is the most universal entertainment that can be enjoyed by people from any background.
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, some
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argued that
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programs
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bring no value
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children
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. I personally disaccord with that statement because of the following reasons which will be shed in the following paragraphs below.
Television
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programs
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are the source of information and
knowledge
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for
children
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.
Children
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can learn skills and
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through
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television
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a television
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program
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programs
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.
For instance
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, when I was a child I learned
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the mandarin
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language by watching
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a Chinese
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television
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program
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programs
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. Today, I can speak mandarin without
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it in school or courses.
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,
television
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programs
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provide
value
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the value
a value
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of learning for
children
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.
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, please bear in mind that not all
television
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programs
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provide bad influences for people and
children
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. There are still several educational
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broadcasted
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on
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television
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.
For example
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,
animal
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the animal
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planet channel always shares about animal activities and their
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. It introduces
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with
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the
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variety of animals and their characteristics. Not only that, but
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geographic channel
also
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shows
knowledge
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about our earth. Through those channels, young adolescents are able to learn
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that is
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not taught in school.
Further
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,
television
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programs
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help
children
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especially toddler to operate their
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minds
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and become interactive. It may enhance their imagination and creativity. To exemplify, my nephew who is currently 7 years old is very creative, it is because when she was a toddler she spent days watched
television
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programs
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such
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as
cartoon
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and kids reality shows. Based on the foregoing, even though some
television
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programs
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provide bad influences
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people and especially
children
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but it cannot be said that
television
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programs
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provide no value for
children
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. In fact,
television
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programs
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are really helpful for the development of
children
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.
However
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, supervision from parents is still needed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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