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Many elderly people are no long looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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nowadays there is a lot of old
people
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 who are prone to bring
care
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homes
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 or nursing
homes
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 because their family are not interested in look after them.
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 there is a number of drawbacks involved in
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 trend,the benefits accruing to elderly
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 are by no means negligible. On the plus side,the advantages of sending old
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 to nursing
homes
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 are manifold.
to begin
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 with,dealing with old
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 is a challenging task that everyone will face one day and everyone reacts to that differently and base on their family circumstances.
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,
families
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 who decide to send their old
parents
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 to
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homes
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 can benefit to have a nuclear family which contains a wife ,husband and kids that they can make a decision base on their own family demands
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 efficient and worthful for kids and spouses.and base on psychological studies nuclear family is the best environment for all member of the family to grow,progress and satisfaction,even though by sending their elderlies they can in charge professions in
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homes
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 to
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 and rescue their elderlies and by
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 they can manage to visit their old
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 in
care
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homes
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 regularly,despite
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 elderly
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 are able to have their own privacy and do their personal stuff by nurses who have experience and understanding of their situations.
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,the downside can not be ignored.the most axiomatic argument is concerned with the elderly mental health because old
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 are more vulnerable than their adulthood so they need more mental and physical
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 from persons who have a memory with them,and by sending them to
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homes
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 they may feel unloved and break
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 that they are not valuable and useful any more for society and their family,
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, one study has been found about old
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 mental health that concludes whom they spend the
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 years of their life with their
families
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 they have less affected from depression and anxiety.
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 children who left their old
parents
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 in the nursing home feel guilty that they do not feel ample empathy and they may tackle mental problems that impact their self-esteem,
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,by reminding old memories they feel more guilty that they have
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 respect and being thankful for their parent's efforts and cares and all they have done for them in childhood. In conclusion, send elderlies to nursing
homes
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 can be both rewarding and problematic.while
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 might help
families
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 to maintain their independence, elderly mental health may be put in jeopardy.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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