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MANY PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT MODERN MUSIC CAN HAVE A NEGETIVE IMPACT ON THE YOUNG. OTHERS BELIEVE THE EFFECT OF MODERN MUSIC IS POSITIVE. DISCUSS BOTH THE VEIWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Some people claim that contemporary
music
have
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 issues on the youth generation whereas others think the opposite and defend the benefits of
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listen
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music
.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of
this
 situation and explain the reasons why
music
 has more pros than cons
in
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the
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teenagers. Listening
music
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 is good for all ages because it can change our mood quick and bring different emotions. The youth people have been
overestimulated
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overstimulated
overestimated
 for many devices and they have had some issues with
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 that required concentration. Lo-fi beats,
for example
, can regulate the heartbeats and
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 in a way that helps to keep focus
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 one task for many hours.
Therefore
,
this
 type of
music
 could be very helpful nowadays with attention disorders, which becomes more and more common among teens. Another beneficial example in the kids is the lyrics because it is a kind of poem with a message
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. For many years,
music
 teaches through its stories about culture, experiences and impressions of the world.
Therefore
 style, lyrics and rhythm are always changing to adapt
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 new generation of listeners or keeping
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memory alive.
On the other hand
, it is not all songs that we can consider beneficial for youngs. In
this
 phase of life, they are still figuring out their characters and personalities and some
noisy
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 as
refered
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referred
 to as
music
, could not be good for them.
For example
,
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brazilian
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 funk is very popular among
youngs
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 and teens,
however
, the lyrics are always
incentivating
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investigating
incentivising
incentivizing
 to commit crimes, rape women and consume drugs.
Therefore
, if I had a teen close to me, I would never
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 him to listen
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those kind
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 of
music
. In my opinion,
music
 is extremely good and could help in different moments in life,
specially
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 for our kids; but requires
attention
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 of the parents to overseas what type of
music
 their children
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. To conclude,
music
 has by far and large more benefits than problems to influence young people because it can change emotions or tell experiences, even though some type of
music
 could have a negative impact.
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