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Many students around the world don’t choose science subjects at university. Give the reasons for this and describe the impact on the community?

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Science
 may be one of the most interesting and complex subjects to learn.
However
, it is a fact that most university
students
 do not pick
science
 as their top subject.
This
 could be due to various reasons
such
 as the level of difficulty or the lack of well-paying jobs in that
field
. I will discuss the various reasons in detail in
this
 essay. Most schools do not provide a strong foundation for learning the basics of
science
.
For example
, from my experience, physics and chemistry were two of the subjects that everyone in my class loathed because of how difficult it was to learn them.
Moreover
, the teachers never tried to make it simpler or more enjoyable.
Thus
, many
students
 chose the
field
 of arts or language, as
this
 appealed to them more. Another reason why
students
 may not pick
science
 in university is due to the lack of high-paying jobs in that
field
. The amount of hard work people need to put in to pass in those classes is wildly disproportionate to the pay and recognition they receive later on in their careers.
For instance
, you need years and years of hard work to become a doctor, after which you only receive a menial salary. In conclusion, the lack of young people in the
science
field
 has numerous negative consequences. There is a dearth of scientists and inventors in today's world. The choice of the younger generations to
opt out
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 of medical and scientific fields leads to a decline in the number of doctors and nurses, which in turn leads to mediocre healthcare.
This
 in turn has disastrous consequences for the community and economy. These problems can only be overcome by giving children a good foundation in
science
 at schools and increasing their interest levels by taking kids to
science
 museums. Raising the salaries of
such
 professions may
also
 act as an incentive for more
students
 to choose
this
 discipline at university.
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