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As a result of growth in some urban centres, the environment in those cities is deteriorating. How could this issue be tackled by both the government and individuals?

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Urbanisation in city centres of both developed and developing countries is slowly deteriorating the air quality of cities, and measures need to be taken to try and reverse
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 change. In
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 essay, we shall look at different ways that government and the citizens can contribute to putting a halt to
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 worrisome trend. Alternately, what the government needs to do, is to strengthen the public transport sectors, impose heavy fines on the number of
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 a family can posse, and
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, they must thrust onto the public fines for using
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 after a certain hour.
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, they should encourage local bicycle businesses, by creating more bicycle lanes and parks, which will in turn help to boost their business. Car manufacturers, must look into the possibility of producing greener cars, and slowly phase out the production of petrol and diesel
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. Once
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 happens, more and more petrol stations will cater to the new requirements by vehicle owners. These are some of the changes that the administration can enforce The natives
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 can make the conscious effort to switch to public transport systems. Electric
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 may be a bit costlier than the normal petrol or diesel
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, but we must try and make the move for the sake of the environment. People must
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 invest in solar panels for their houses so that they can avoid the use of boilers and heaters. In conclusion, it is detrimental to solve the ever persisting problem of air pollution,
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, we must remember that for
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 to be nipped in the bud, everyone, the governments, and mankind need to do their part.
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