Some people say that the main environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

Nowadays, there are numerous
problems
which
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related to
environment
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the environment

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all over the world. Some population believes that extinction of the unique sort of forests and wildlife are major of environmental circumstances.
On the other hand
, some group of citizens admire that the other vital
problems
should be considered.
Therefore
, the surrounding
problems
come across based on the various factors which affect
to
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whatever live in
this
world.
To begin
with, the growth of populations is higher than the previous many years, so the constructions are built in the different areas
such
as house, communities and so on for better lifestyle.
For example
, the families want
habitants
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habitats

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which
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are comfortable in
traveling
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to work or study and having
the
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massive spaces for their children where can run and play in their area without
go
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outside. These requirements are urging to
investor
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an investor
the investor

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in real estate investment in looking for the new areas to construct
that is
cause
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the cause
a cause

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of the deforestation.
Consequently
, the number of forests is less and
also
do not have animal’s
habitants
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habitats

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and food.
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,
the
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climate change is vital
problems
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problem

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which
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everyone has to confront, so they make
organism
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organisms

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whatever
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need
adapt
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to adapt

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themselves to changing the environment suddenly for survival. For
instant
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an instant

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, humanity drives a car in
a
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daily life which release the toxin gases to the air including the industries and household.
Therefore
, these factors have
severely
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impact
to
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on

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life. In my perspective, the environmental
problems
have the standard from human
behaviors
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which can not control the pollution and conservation. In summarise,
although
these
problems
will have the different domain, it affects to
life
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. Indeed, citizens should have
the
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campaign in preserving the environment.
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