In recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative?

Over the recent years, the structure of the family has seen many
changes
with roles being reversed. Though some may say that
such
transformations are good for
the
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society while others may debate it. In
this
essay, I shall comment upon the
changes
that have occurred in the
families
these
days
and
also
discuss the
merits
and demerits of
such
changes
. As per my personal
opinion
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these
changes
are definitely not good for
the
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society. Overall, the
families
these
days
have certainly shrunk in size. In earlier
days
people
believed to stay in joint
families
but
the
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recent times have seen the shift from joint
familes
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to nuclear
families
.
People
find it much more comfortable to live in nuclear
families
. The other change
that is
evident is that earlier only the male member would be the sole earner of the family. But nowadays it is not uncommon to see females earning the bread for the family. Another change that can be seen is that earlier a family would have anywhere between three to four children. But these
days
people
believe to have a compact and
a
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close knit
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family with only one child or at the maximum only two children. These are a few
changes
that can be observed in today’s family structure. Let us now discuss the
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and negative aspects of
such
transitions.
Firstly
to talk about the
merits
, with the ladies coming forth to work, is certainly making them much more independent and confident.
Also
with two
people
earning (both the husband and the wife) in a family, the income flowing in is definitely better.
This
gives the family
the
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much needed financial stability. On the flip side, with both the parents working, I feel that the child/children get neglected. Their growth both academically and physically is hindered due to the absence of parents. The other biggest disadvantage I feel is that the family is devoid of any support system. With
such
a compact family, when some disaster strikes in any form
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it
health related
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or finance related or for that matter any other issue, the family does not have a
fall back
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system. And
thus
suffers. In my opinion, it is best to have a joint family
due
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the obvious
merits
discussed above.
Hence
to conclude, it is quite
eveident
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that
the
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families
these
days
are seeing many
changes
and transformations. These transitions have their own
merits
and demerits but it is my personal opinion that dwelling in a large joint family is always beneficial.
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