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Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
the
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modern society, people tend to receive information and knowledge
by
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 several ways. Some experts believe that reading books give more benefits to the reader than those who
getting
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 information from watching TV or playing computer games. Personally, I agree that reading books give more potential to children than using other social media. Knowing what is happening by reading can help children improve their linguistic ability. Youngsters who receive information by reading tend to
familiar
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 with words and several types of grammar structures.
This
 encourages them to do
best
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 performance in studying especially in literature subject.
In addition
 to
this
, reading books motivate the younger to be more creative and help them
further
 their imaginations.
For example
, while they are reading stories describing only in words without any images, they have to imagine their own picture related to the story in their head.
This
 can help them develop both sides of their brain. To make it clearer, knowing
story
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 by reading improve not only in linguistic but
also
 in creativity.
Nevertheless
, watching TV or playing computer games use pictures to illustrate the stories
instead
 of bunches of
alphabets
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 which make it easier to understand.
For instance
, when
young
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 generation
eager
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 to learn how to bake a cake, explaining them by using video or computer programs is easier to understand and remember.
In other words
, getting knowledge from seeing through pictures make it more understandable and memorable. In conclusion, after having considered
this
 idea carefully, even using photos to describe a story can make it clearer to understand, receiving stories from reading help children improve more abilities in learning and imaging.
Therefore
 it
give
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 more benefits than any other
ways
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.
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