Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better than watching TV or playing computer games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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modern society, people tend to receive information and knowledge
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several ways. Some experts believe that reading books give more benefits to the reader than those who
getting
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information from watching TV or playing computer games. Personally, I agree that reading books give more potential to children than using other social media. Knowing what is happening by reading can help children improve their linguistic ability. Youngsters who receive information by reading tend to
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with words and several types of grammar structures.
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encourages them to do
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performance in studying especially in literature subject.
In addition
to
this
, reading books motivate the younger to be more creative and help them
further
their imaginations.
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, while they are reading stories describing only in words without any images, they have to imagine their own picture related to the story in their head.
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can help them develop both sides of their brain. To make it clearer, knowing
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by reading improve not only in linguistic but
also
in creativity.
Nevertheless
, watching TV or playing computer games use pictures to illustrate the stories
instead
of bunches of
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which make it easier to understand.
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, when
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generation
eager
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to learn how to bake a cake, explaining them by using video or computer programs is easier to understand and remember.
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, getting knowledge from seeing through pictures make it more understandable and memorable. In conclusion, after having considered
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idea carefully, even using photos to describe a story can make it clearer to understand, receiving stories from reading help children improve more abilities in learning and imaging.
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it
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more benefits than any other
ways
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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