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Many small businesses are being forced to close because they are unable compete with multinational corporation? what problem does this cause and how can problem be solved?

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It is one of
facts
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 that in the
business
 world, those owners need to compete with each other, some
are lose
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 and force to shut down the
business
, some might conquer and become the number one in the
business
.
However
, there is one undeniable fact that many people who owned a small
business
 need to shut down their
business
 due to larger
companies
.
To begin
 with, in
this
 modern world, economics has a significant
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 because
of
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the
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capitalism encourages small
businesses
 to challenge larger
businesses
.
This
 is the consequence from the
government
 policy that if there
are
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 competition between
business
, economics are likely to grow up fast, make the
government
 can gain
taxes
 from
business
. And, these
taxes
 will become
a
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 blood of the country to develop the country.
However
, there are some solutions
in
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this
 problem, meanwhile, the authorities still gain the
taxes
.
Firstly
, the
government
 should adjust policies, reduce
taxes
 for small
businesses
, and support to make they can compete with others, while increasing
taxes
 for larger
companies
, or making larger
companies
 donate the money to societies for
development
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 of communities
instead
 of getting more payment. In summary, the
government
 should play an essential role in
this
 competition to make small
businesses
 equal to larger
businesses
 because it is hard for small
businesses
 to survive after compete with larger
businesses
. And, the other reason is to make the competition between small and larger
companies
 go on, to make the
economic
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develop
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 in order to
reduces
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 poverty in people.
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