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Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development.

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Communication
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 plays a vital role in conveying ideas among
others
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. At present, the majority of the population are selecting the internet than direct
communication
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 in order to socialise. I strongly believe that
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 has a negative impact than
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one positive. On the one hand, using online become popular due to being less time consuming whereas
people
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 in society are busy with their day to day activities. The major impact on
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 confidential issues where anyone who is Permitted to access the internet can interrupt the ongoing processes. Recent researches conducted by Oxford University have shown that 15% of the person who is using online have less confidence in
communication
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 not only with strangers but friends
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, anyone meet
others
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 directly, the conversation will be personal and it will create a strong bond among
others
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.
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, internet usage is not an easy task for every group of
people
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 in society and adults are having lack knowledge of sophisticated technology.
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 the additional costs will be incurred in order to have the relevant knowledge and there may a miscommunication while using those methods that are not familiar. In most Asian countries, a large proportion of elder
people
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 with poor knowledge are facing difficulties in using mobile devices and it will lead to isolation from society. Today, more
people
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 are using online than two-way
communication
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 to socialize and it has a negative development. To become the process “socialization” in an effective manner, it is mandatory to meet each
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 directly which facilitate making good relationship with
others
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