Many teenagers are encouraged by their parents to get a part-time job. What are the advantages and disadvantages of teenagers working part-time?

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. Those who
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advantages
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two work at the same
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lots of teenagers can manage
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while working and it was a huge
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having two
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at the same
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.It was a good experience because day by day they learned and trained how to be an independent and great achiever.It will
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ourselves
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while studying cannot enjoy the teenage
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school
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and the groom that the teenager looks. And as we all
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few teenagers
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,few kids lucky having a wealthy
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focus
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other facings.
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wealthy
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.They can handle and easy to pass whatever trials they are facing easily to find
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in any
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that they can say to the future teenagers what they facing before and the
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that they are achieving today.
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