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CCTV cameras are a common sight in town centres, on public transport and outside many businesses. They not only help identify and apprehend criminals but also serve as a crime deterrent. However, some people believe that they are intrusive and constitute a breach of privacy. What do you feel is more important, personal privacy or public safety?

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Throughout the
world
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 many countries provided their crowded areas with
CCTV
cameras
 which are beneficial in order to identify criminals and solve a
crime
.
In contrast
 to its benefits, many people worry about their
privacy
 and can not trust
CCTV
.
This
 essay will discuss the arguments supporting the importance of public safety rather than personal
privacy
.
First
 of all, the main purpose of
CCTV
cameras
 is solving
crime
, identifying suspicious actions and preventing their repentance. Modern technologies give an opportunity to find out information about criminals by matching identities and analyse their history of
crime
. As an example, the world rate of the safest countries with the lowest value of
crime
 shows that South Korea is estimated as the safest country. The reason for
this
 value is explained by the appearance of
CCTV
cameras
 everywhere in the country. South Korea is provided with the latest technical equipment and
cameras
 have a significant role in their social life because all of the crimes are being solved by the work of
cameras
 even in rural areas.
Secondly
, the
CCTV
 camera is loaded by the government with an appreciation of
privacy
 laws. Street
cameras
 are used only in case of alarm situations and looking for someone particular. In
every day
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,life it is hard to match the street
cameras
. Despite the fact
that is
 always turned on, people will worry about their
privacy
, but an accident would happen suddenly and anywhere. Considering all the arguments mentioned below, the
CCTV
 camera are actions to avoid a
crime
,
therefore
 public safety can overweight personal
privacy
.
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