CCTV cameras are a common sight in town centres, on public transport and outside many businesses. They not only help identify and apprehend criminals but also serve as a crime deterrent. However, some people believe that they are intrusive and constitute a breach of privacy. What do you feel is more important, personal privacy or public safety?

Nowadays, when technology is developing rapidly,
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number of
CCTV
cameras
are located in town centres and most populated places. It is believed that
cameras
are intrusive and constitute a breach of
privacy
, even if they serve as a crime detector. In my opinion, both personal
privacy
and public safety are important, as every individual should have a guarantee that they have personal
privacy
and are protected from criminals.
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with,
CCTV
cameras
were created with
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detecting criminals and illegal actions.
Thus
, they are not needed to be in every angle of town centres, since they can imbalance the situation of people that are arguing about personal
privacy
.
For instance
, many organisations and businesses do not require
such
security, as they are not government objects. In
this
case, personal
privacy
should be in the
first
place.
Furthermore
, according to recent statistics about
CCTV
cameras
, most of them are situated in unnecessary places which means the movement to
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is required.
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in places around unpopulated regions should be removed. It guarantees that it does not constitute a breach of
privacy
. In conclusion, despite the fact that
CCTV
cameras
help to identify criminals, personal activity should be taken into consideration, too.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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