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CCTV cameras are a common sight in town centres, on public transport and outside many businesses. They not only help identify and apprehend criminals but also serve as a crime deterrent. However, some people believe that they are intrusive and constitute a breach of privacy. What do you feel is more important, personal privacy or public safety?

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Nowadays, when technology is developing rapidly,
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 number of
CCTV
cameras
 are located in town centres and most populated places. It is believed that
cameras
 are intrusive and constitute a breach of
privacy
, even if they serve as a crime detector. In my opinion, both personal
privacy
 and public safety are important, as every individual should have a guarantee that they have personal
privacy
 and are protected from criminals.
To begin
 with,
CCTV
cameras
 were created with
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 purpose
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 detecting criminals and illegal actions.
Thus
, they are not needed to be in every angle of town centres, since they can imbalance the situation of people that are arguing about personal
privacy
.
For instance
, many organisations and businesses do not require
such
 security, as they are not government objects. In
this
 case, personal
privacy
 should be in the
first
 place.
Furthermore
, according to recent statistics about
CCTV
cameras
, most of them are situated in unnecessary places which means the movement to
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 is required.
For example
,
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 in places around unpopulated regions should be removed. It guarantees that it does not constitute a breach of
privacy
. In conclusion, despite the fact that
CCTV
cameras
 help to identify criminals, personal activity should be taken into consideration, too.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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