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Nowadays many people choose to be self employed rather than to work for a company or organization. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantage of being self employed?

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There has been a tremendous shift in
work
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 culture among individuals. People nowadays prefer to be
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self employed
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instead
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 of, working under any organization.
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 there are some obvious benefits of “being your own boss”, there are certain drawbacks as well.
Millenials
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 nowadays tend to start a business or do freelance
work
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 rather than working for a company or organization, mainly because of the perks of working independently. Being
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self employed
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 would provide flexibility for an individual to control his working hours,
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, improving the
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-life balance.
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, when working for an organization there will be certain rules in place for entering and leaving the office while
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 not the case for freelancing.
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, unlike being employed under an organisation,
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self employment
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 would allow the person to choose the field he needs to
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 as, art, programming, investing, etc, thereby leading to an increase in job satisfaction.
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,
besides
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 all the
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benifits
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benefits
 provided by
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self
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employment
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 there are
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 some disadvantages to it.
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, unlike working for an establishment, there will be no stable source of income for a freelancer,
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, many of the freelancers working in the entertainment industries were hit badly by the Covid-19 pandemic.
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, people starting
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 own business often become stressed out due to managing finance and sometimes even give up due to lack of motivation,
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 making their situation even worse. In conclusion, nowadays we are observing a tremendous shift in the working culture of
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, where less number of individuals prefer to
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 for an employer.
Benifits
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Benefits
 like flexible working hours and job satisfaction are the main reasons for
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 change in mindset.
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, there are some disadvantages to being
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self employed
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 like
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 inconsistent source of income and
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an increase
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 in stress.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • freedom
  • pursue
  • passion
  • interest
  • income
  • financial success
  • control
  • working hours
  • work-life balance
  • empowerment
  • ownership
  • job security
  • stability
  • financial challenges
  • isolation
  • social interaction
  • self-discipline
  • motivation
  • deadlines
  • supervisors
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