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Behaviour in school is getting worse .Explain the causes and the effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions

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In comparison to the past decades,these days
children
 tend to behave less properly with each other and with their
parents
 and teachers as well.
This
 essay will discuss the common reasons and the consequences of
this
 issue among
children
 and will suggest some helpful suggestions afterwards.
To begin
 with,it's undeniable that
children
 are extremely quick learners and they imitate what they have been taught. Obviously,no decent person wants to teach a child bad manners or habits intentionally but it is in the child nature to capture and mimic others' behaviours.
Therefore
, I believe that if
children
 do not behave properly, we should
first
 put the blame on the family members who brought them up.
Moreover
, another possible reason for
children
 misbehaviour could be the TV programs they watch or games they play or even other
children
 they play to.These are all playing a significant role in building the
children
's character.
As a result
, these
children
 may seem to be impolite or annoying and sometimes show violence in their actions which ultimately cause them to lose their friends and grownups attention and will be left alone . To continue, there are some possible solutions for the above-mentioned issue.
First
 of all,it is the
parents
 and other elder family members responsibility to behave to each other on the basis of compassion and respect and have the same attitude towards the
children
 in the family. Punishing
children
 ,yelling at them ,neglecting them and all other negative treats rise the tendency of
further
 misbehaviour in
children
. Another point is that
parents
 must be careful that
children
 only watch TV programs and play games that have targeted their age group. Grownups programs may have destructive effects on their behaviour . In conclusion, in my point of view observing
children
 manners precisely must be taken into consideration by 
parents
. If a child is not behaving expectedly ,it is the parent's duty to consult with a psychologist and use their assistance to prevent
further
 occurrence as soon as possible.
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